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    Re: Tetsukobushi

    Post by Sankaku Uminooya on Sun Aug 23, 2009 3:19 am

    GENERAL INFO

    Name: Tetsukobushi

    Age: 14

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    Village: none

    Rank: Genin

    Element: none

    Occupation:Monk

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    OTHER INFO

    Family: N/A

    Sensei: N/A

    Students: N/A

    Team: N/A

    Weaknesses: genjutsu over confident but at the same time overestimates the opponent

    Strengths: Taijutsu



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    Re: Tetsukobushi

    Post by Sankaku Uminooya on Sun Aug 23, 2009 5:19 am

    It is unknown if Tetsukobushi's parents were dead. However after their disappearance Tetsukobushi began traveling. As Tetsukobushi traveled he learned about the monks and what they did. Tetsukobushi became interested and learned the taijutsu. However the more he traveled and learned the more perverted he became. He didn't know why how ever he was still said to be a good monk even though he wasn't later on he traveled to grain.

    However While Tetsukobushi's travel to Grain country he heard rumors of the monk being great and having a two students but one hasn't reached there yet. Tetsukobushi though however the best was Kasai Odoriko or something. Tetsukobushi became obsessed to be the best student.

    However while he traveled he heard rumors that he had a human sealed inside him. However no ordinary human one with very special abilities however Tetsukobushi didn't know what they were.
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    Re: Tetsukobushi

    Post by Sankaku Uminooya on Sun Sep 06, 2009 9:07 pm

    Personality:Tetsukobushi is usually serious and strict. However if angry he becomes bloodthirsty they say you can tell because his staff will become pure black.

    Appearance: The face of his avatar however he usually wears a large cloak tan with buddha symbols all over it.

    Rp Sample:Tetsukobushi looks up into the sky as the clouds float willingly through the air. THe wind blows gently and slowly as Tetsukobushi continues his Chi Meditation. The sunset yellow and orange. Tetsukobushi smiles as he continues his Chi Meditation.
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    Re: Tetsukobushi

    Post by Kai T. Kouseitan'i on Sun Sep 06, 2009 10:39 pm

    Approved
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    Re: Tetsukobushi

    Post by Shikamori Nara on Sun Sep 06, 2009 11:39 pm

    Length: Your rp sample, personality, and description are on the short side so I can't give you a great grade here. Try to lengthen them. 5/10

    Quality: There's not much to really evaluate for quality, there are also mistakes in what little you have. The overall flow of the bio isn't great it seems like an abrupt statement of fact after fact since almost every sentence starts with your name or the phrase however. Try to vary your sentences more and use descriptions. 4/10

    Description: Once again there's not much to evaluate but what little you had was barely described at all, especially the description of looks. 3/10

    POV: You used third person throughout which is good, though you didn't do so great with it. 7/10

    19/40 = F
    Approved at Academy Student Level.
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    Re: Tetsukobushi

    Post by Sankaku Uminooya on Fri Sep 11, 2009 12:31 pm

    XDD you just gotta love shika for his honesty.
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